Sunday Morning Writer’s Blog
I’ve promised my writing students that every Sunday morning I would talk about an aspect of the writing craft. So here’s my offering for February 19: the God of Story lies in the details. That means kicking the slothful habit of using vague, general language. For instance, something, somewhere, somehow are vague and general. So is the adjective little, which Graham Greene considered sentimental.
Here’s another example: a novice might think that “big” is the best word to describe the insides of the whale that swallowed Jonah for three days. But big is vague and general. In fact, big is one of the most general words in the English language. Relatively speaking, mostly everything is big compared to everything else that’s smaller. So if a writer uses the word big to describe the whale in the Biblical story of a man being swallowed by a fish, that writer isn’t doing their job. But if the writer describes how the whale’s intestines smelled to Jonah, there’s no need to use the adjective big. The concrete, specific detail about the intestines powerfully conjures up Jonah’s predicament. Namely, the whale is so big the stink of its intestines make it hard for Jonah to breathe.
In his novel, A Widow for One Year, John Irving calls this kind of detail, “the chosen detail, not a remembered one.” Irving argues through the voice of one of his characters, that the best fictional detail was the detail that should have defined the character or the episode or the atmosphere. “Novels were not arguments; a story worked, or it didn’t on its own merits,” Irving writes in his book. “What does it matter if a detail was real or imagined? What mattered was that the detail seemed real, and that it was absolutely the best detail for the circumstances.”
Flaubert called it using “le mot juste.” In the writing workshops I give, students sometimes respond to the need for details by providing a laundry list of adjectives that describe a person or situation in their story. Laundry lists of descriptive adjectives are better than pages of vague, general language. But they’re still not what is needed. Choosing the most characteristic detail is always better, and that can take more time, but it’s worth it, for both you and your reader.
Sometimes novels grow out of an unexpected situation or in the case of my last book, from a comment that turns your head around and makes you see something in a different light. My conversation about Casanova with Jack Crean (an uncle-in-law) was one of those times. I went from an ardent Casanova dis-misser to an ardent fan and I wrote a novel in which Casanova is featured as a character. This visual blog tells how it happened.
For your information, What Casanova Told Me tells the story of Casanova’s last love, Asked For Adams, an American Yankee and a descendant of Puritans, who first met Casanova in a barge coming into Venice in 1798 when Casanova was in his early seventies. Casanova was disguised as old woman in a court wig during their first encounter and their affair progressed from there. Asked For’s 20th century descendant followed the lovers’ travel route using Asked For’s old diary.
Authors Susan Swan, Claudia Dey, Linda Griffiths and more share their favourite erotic read in this week’s edition of the Globe and Mail. Check it out by clicking HERE and add your own pick.
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Making Things Up
Some years ago, an American novelist gave me a piece of advice: Always pick a narrator that is like you and not like you so you have room to invent. Her advice was invaluable. And now that I am revising a novel set in my hometown, Midland, Ontario, I am even more struck by the wisdom in her words. Why? Looking back over my revisions for The Western Light, I see that I was more intent on reproducing certain things that happened to me. Not because those things were what the story needed (always the first rule of thumb in fiction) but because they happened to me and I wanted them to be literally true on the page.
Mouse Bradford, my narrator in The Western Light has a neglectful country doctor father. And I too, was a child of a country doctor in the fifties. So my first drafts for this book had “a poor me” quality because I felt neglected by my father as a girl. After all, how does a doctor spend time with his family if there is no medicare and doctors had to work around the clock? And how does a child find a space for their feelings about their father, who, like many doctors in small towns, was a revered figure? It was a problem. A problem that got me writing a novel. And that’s good because writing novels is my business.
As I’ve written my way through these drafts, something has shifted. I’ve stopped feeling sorry for myself, for one. For another, I’ve remembered that my character Mouse is not me. She has some experiences in common with me, and certain patterns of thinking, but she is a different person than the author, me, who created her on the page. That’s really no surprise because novels distill and dramatize.
Memoirs distill and dramatize too, but the basic facts in a memoir need to be true. The author of a memoir is held accountable in a way that novelists aren’t. Lucky us. Lucky me for having so much creative freedom. I really didn’t need to work so hard at reproducing my childhood. Yes, I want the atmosphere and setting in the novel to have an authentic 1950’s feel. So I got in touch with my hometown’s facebook page and our group has been talking over all sorts of things about Midland, Ontario in the fifties. Things like where the old Georgian Hotel used to be on main street. And how did taxi drivers run a bootlegging business on the side. I’ve also heard wonderful new stories about my father that I am grateful for knowing. My novel will be richer as a result of these fb conversations and I am grateful there too.
Geographical and biographical facts help create the setting in a more or less realistic novel. But fictional characters are an invention even if you write in the first person. Henry Miller who wrote in the first person was not quite the same person as his brazen, bohemian narrator. And Mouse Bradford is not me either.
This is what really happened, we tell ourselves. So this is how it must be on the page. Not so. Truth is not autobiography. And staying true to what happened is the best way to take a story down the wrong road.
Setting for author’s novel ‘The Western Light’ based on Midland
MIDLAND – It’s been said that you can never go home again, but internationally acclaimed writer Susan Swan is doing just that.
The story, a prequel to her 1993 bestselling novel “The Wives of Bath,” was inspired by several events she learned about as a child – including one involving her physician father.
“(He was) reputed to have saved the son of a lightkeeper out in the Western (Islands) whose boy got an attack of appendicitis,” she told The Mirrorfrom her home in Toronto. “The lightkeeper and his family couldn’t get to town because a storm had trapped them there, so my father told the lightkeeper he would walk him through the operation step-by-step over the ship-to-shore phone.”
Swan said she was always inspired by the story because she couldn’t imagine how someone could operate on his own son; she was also awed by her father’s unflappable nature.
Although the town in her novel is called Maddox Landing, Swan said Midland is the inspiration because she felt this area’s landscape is historically important.
“It’s laden with history and was a demanding and, one might say, harsh physical landscape in the days when my father was young that seemed to call for physical giants like my father. Brébeuf and Jesus even would fit right in to Simcoe County because it was a very challenging environment,” she said. “I was fascinated by the way it was tamed by the pioneers and men like my father.”
The story’s protagonist is Mary (Mouse) Bradford, who is seeking to find out more about her dad. Swan said the tale is also, in a way, about her own quest to understand her father, who died when she was 18.
John Pilkie, the ex-NHL character in the novel, was inspired by two real-life individuals: Johnny Gallagher, who helped the Detroit Red Wings win the Stanley Cup in 1937, but was admitted to the psychiatric hospital in Penetanguishene after suffering multiple head injuries; and Mel Wilkie, a mental patient who had murdered his wife and baby daughter.
“Wilkie was always escaping to draw attention to his case. In those days, there was no review board for mental patients the way there was for convicts. Once you were put in a psychiatric hospital, you pretty well stayed there until you died,” she said, adding her father looked after some of the patients and used to play tennis with one of them. “My father was a very compassionate man, but his job kept him from spending much time with our family when I was growing up.”
The story follows Mouse’s friendship with the man dubbed the Hockey Killer. “I am returning, in a way, to one of my favourite narrators,” she said, adding it is Mouse’s vulnerability that draws her back to the character. “She’d had polio as a kid and felt physically weak. John Pilkie, who she becomes friends with, is a marvellous athlete and skates across the ice in great swooping strides that Mouse wishes she could do. He inspires her, but he’s a dangerous man because he’s had this concussion and this troubled history.”
Swan, who returned to Midland in November as part of the International Festival of Authors, said she promised Huronia Museum curator Jamie Hunter that she will come back for a reading next year when the book is released. She said returning to Midland in the fall after so many years was both a haunting and moving experience. “It felt like I had one foot in the 1950s and one foot in the 21st century,” she said. “It’s like being in your imagination and in the real world at the same time.… It’s a slightly schizophrenic feeling, but it’s exciting.”
Swan began her writing career working summers as a reporter at The Midland Free Press. “The Western Light” will be published by Cormorant Press in the spring of 2013.
Article courtesy of simcoe.com
I solved the problem of killing off an old boyfriend in my revision of my next novel, The Western Light. He is only half-dead. By that I mean I haven’t changed Little Louie’s ex-lover as dramatically as I was thinking about doing. He just has some new traits, an interest in socialism and a job running a trade union in Windsor, and these characteristics will be a good foil for Little Louie’s mother, Big Louie, a matriarch who runs an oil patch in Petrolia, Ontario. So you see, instead of a full-fledged revolutionary, my minor but still important character ends up being a Canadian new democrat, of all things.
Enriching characters instead of killing them often happens when I’m revising a novel. At first, I think I must do something drastic to the character so they are unrecognizable and then I realize that I’m dealing with shades, not black and white brush strokes. After all, I’m a Gemini and I tend to swing to two extremes before I settle on the right solution. But this morning I’m thinking of another problem that goes with rewriting a novel: going on automatic pilot. Or, let me put it this way, getting lulled into the uselessness of drone writing.
To go back to a piece of writing it’s imperative that you, the writer, see it in a fresh way. If you’re lucky, like me and you have a good editor (or mentor) they will say things that open up the scene you are writing instead of closing you down. They will ask you questions like … can you tell me more about character X, or what does the mother’s boyfriend think about the mother’s daughter? But if you’re not lucky, you may tend to do what I do when I’m feeling insecure–polish the first twenty (substitute any number here) pages relentlessly and feel like I’ve been working hard. Polishing, or putting on the gloss, as Jonathon Franzen puts it, is a good thing to do at the very end of a book but not before.
In fact, drone writing, or ceaseless re-writing of the same passages is usually about the writer trying to control the creative process that can feel open-ended and scary. One of Albert Camus’ characters, the man who continuously rewrote the first sentence of a novel, probably rewrote the sentence out of fear. He was nervous, in other words, of plunging in without trying to control the anxiety involved in creating a book.
Surrendering to the process of writing a novel and letting it take you somewhere new is unnerving, especially if you have a Presbyterian background like I do, and you’re determined to more or less write what you set out to write. So before I know it I can gallop off and revise something I’ve revised twenty times before without really looking closely at the emotional sub-text of my scene. At this stage I can no longer see hear or feel what I’m writing about and I don’t know that I’ve lost my emotional connection to the material either. And maybe I don’t want to know it because I’m more interested in satisfying my anxiety than writing at a deeper emotional level. But the truth is I’m wasting my time. I should sit back and re-examine thoughtfully what is happening with my characters in the passage I’m revising.
If I’m smart, I might ask Joyce Carol Oates’ important question, is this passage as good as it can be? If not, why? If I sit and listen long enough, the answer will come, and then I will put aside my drone writing, and get to work.
This week on Spark:
“Literary History of Word Processing, Accelerated Innovation, Education, and Employment”
Catch it live on Sunday January 22 at 1:05 local time. Or listen to the podcast anytime at:
Friday was Video Podcast Day. Why? Because I’m finishing a revision of my new novel, The Western Light (publication date: spring of 2013). But just to keep myself busy I’m also doing a book club promotion for Valentine’s Day about my already published historical novel, What Casanova Told Me. And the podcast will be offered to book clubs doing the novel.
My novel which covers two centuries, two women, and a long-lost Journal, is a celebration of love and travel that I hope will incite readers to pack their bags in search of adventure. In the novel are Casanova’s 10 commandments of travel. Number two says:
“Write down what it is you desire and tear your wish into a dozen pieces. Then fling the scraps into a large body of water. (Any ocean will do.)”
One reader asked me if she could throw her wish into Lake Nippissing if the lake was frozen over. In the spirit of Casanova, I said, of course.
Here is a brief look at what else is available in the book club offer:
1. A book club guide to the novel available on Random House website complete with Author Q&A
and discussion questions) for What Casanova Told Me: http://www.bookclubs.ca/catalog/display.pperl?isbn=9780676975772 – Be sure to click on the buttons on the left-hand side, under “Resources.”
2. A fifteen minute podcast from Susan discussing her novel and her fascination with Casanova.
(It will be emailed to your book club leader before your event and can be shared with your members.)*
*That’s what we’re shooting tomorrow. It will be ready to go next week.
3. A twenty-five minute Q and A with Susan and your book club through Skype.
4. Other features such as the song What Casanova Told Me inspired by the novel and writtenby Albertan folk singer Corrie Brewster are available under multimedia on Susan’s blog
If your club makes What Casanova Told Me your Valentine, you will receive a free signed copy for a book club
raffle of The Biggest Modern Woman of the World, Swan’s novel about the giantess Anna Swan. Your book
club will also receive a free Bookshort, a short film about What Casanova Told Me on DVD with a short film
inspired by the novel.
Please let us know if this will be your Book Club Valentine this year.
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